Crowded
by =FoxyScorpionGay pride all the way!
But I can't marry this man.
Only listen here!
Straight pride is bullshit!
Mother and Father say he's
Straights have no problems.
You know little pain!
African American
You cannot hate us!
Homophobe you are,
and that I am Caucasian.
for not understanding.
This world must focus
I'm just a girl who's lived up
on our world only.
Cant you see what we
to their expectations; but
go through! Cant you see
why you must support
I love him. Why can't we love?
us and our trails of
pain and suffering?
Why does society look down
Look only at us!
Turn around and see!
upon us? It's too crowded here
Listen to our voice!












But I know what you mean. Honestly, we don't mean to bash your head in with our pride, but it's what comes with being told we're second-class citizens. We want to show people--not people like you, but the homophobes in society--that we're gay and we're proud of it, so we're not going away and you (the homophobes) have to deal with it.
Thirdly, I think everyone at times acts like their problems are the only ones in the world. And it's not that we assume that straights have better lives than us; it's just that we feel that you can have a better life than us because you don't face discrimination for being straight while we face discrimination for being gay. But that doesn't include all the other problems you mention and allude to, which certainly affect everyone differently, is it's certainly a mixed pot.
And to sum this all up, I honestly love this poem. Love faces struggles in all facets of life, not just with straight people and gay people, but with love in general, and we need to set aside differences to work towards a society of love. It shouldn't matter who you love; it should matter that you love, right?
My personal view on this poem is this: shit happens to everyone, so why do we need to make a big deal about one group and ignore another group? Sure, there's gay rights, but what about asexual rights? Or transgendered rights? Or just plain and simple tolerance for all rights? We're all human and we all have problems, so let's help everyone out. If everyone felt this way, however, this idea of gay pride wouldn't be an issue anymore.
As for the style of this poem, I loved it. The italic sentences forming their own verse inside the whole structure was a serious Inception moment! Though there were a couple forgotten apostrophes, overall it was clean and wonderful. The two-way dialogue inside of the poem (the strength of the gay pride versus the weak disappearance of the interracial point of view) set up a powerful contrast that really sets things into perspective. I think it really makes me, as a proud gay man, step back and think about my actions and others.
Thank you for this provocative and insightful piece!
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